Sample Essay - TOEFL Independent Writing Task
Below is a sample "super" essay for the independent writing task of the TOEFL. This is meant to be a model essay; it may be far more advanced than most test-takers can achieve within the 30-minute time limit to write, but you can study the vocabulary, sentence structure, and argument flow to improve your own essays.
Question:
Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other people prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
Response:
Word count: 466 words
One of the main reasons why I like to live at a more unhurried speed is because that way I can really savor each moment. I have a flower garden in my back yard and I love to take my time mixing compost into the soil, pruning damaged branches, and watering the flowers. I also simply enjoy examining the beautiful petals of the flowers. When I do all these things, I feel very grounded in the present moment. I also feel this deep satisfaction when I stroll along a beach or in a forest. I cherish being able to fully absorb the sights and sounds of nature during such walks.
In addition to enjoying the present moment, I also appreciate how slowing down gives me time to reflect on my past and future, as well as to ponder other ideas. I can relive wonderful memories and learn lessons from less pleasant ones. Taking time out to contemplate past mistakes helps me make better choices in the future. I can’t achieve these gains so well if I am in a rush. I also like to let my imagination run wild with ideas and scenarios that I know will never come to pass in real life. During these reveries I can also generate creative ideas that I can actually act upon in the future. I know that I am most capable of developing innovative solutions to problems at work when I have precious idle time.
So far I have emphasized the mental health benefits of living at a more moderate pace, but there are many physical health benefits too. Scientific studies have shown that the stress of fast-paced living can increase one’s risk of having a heart attack or stroke, and lead to increased vulnerability to many infections. I used to work 13-hour workdays at a factory 6 days a week, which was a very stressful experience. My blood-pressure had skyrocketed, and I had early warning symptoms of diabetes. After I quit my job there and began my university studies, I was able to reduce my blood pressure and restore my health through having a more relaxed daily routine and caring for my potted plants.
In short, I very much prefer to live at a slower pace. Doing so has numerous advantages for my mental and physical well-being that I have learned from my personal experience and from rigorous scholarship.
(c) 2017 by Diacorda Amosapa
hastily - adv. quickly, too quickly (adj. - hasty)
~ “We’re late!” she said, as she hastily put her jacket on.
~ Jake hastily typed notes as several team members made suggestions.
savor - v. to enjoy fully every moment of an experience
~ She really savored the taste of the sauce.
~ I savored every minute of that movie. It was so enjoyable to watch!
cherish - v. to love a lot, to value intensely
~ I cherish the time I spend playing with my 3 year-old daughter.
~ I will always cherish the memories I have of us learning together.
ponder - v. think about
~ She pondered whether to wash the dishes or clean her room first.
~ He looked out the window as he pondered over what topic to research for his school report.
vulnerability - n. ability to be hurt
~ There were many vulnerabilities in the coding that the programmers needed to fix.
~ The singer’s fans love the vulnerability expressed in the words of his songs.
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