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TOEFL Essay - Classroom Attendance

Should class attendance be required? - No!

 

Sample Essay - TOEFL Independent Writing Task

Below is a sample "super" essay for the independent writing task of the TOEFL.  This is meant to be a model essay; it may be far more advanced than most test-takers can achieve within the 30-minute time limit to write, but you can study the vocabulary, sentence structure, and argument flow to improve your own essays.  

 

Question: 
Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students.  Which point of view do you agree with?  Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

Response:

Word count: 483 words

Whether attending classes should be mandatory for university students is a controversial topic for students, teachers, and school administrators. Many people support compulsory attendance as a vital part of academic success. Others, however, advocate for more flexibility for both practical and educational reasons. I think that making class attendance optional has several benefits that make it ultimately a better policy.

One reason for why I believe attendance should be optional is that doing so could actually enhance student academic achievement. As long as a student is able to demonstrate understanding of the course material through homework assignments, reports, and exams, then the student should be free to use what would have been time in the class to instead study more challenging material from other more difficult classes. Using the additional time this way could thus enhance the student’s overall academic performance.

Another reason for not making class attendance required is because people may have family responsibilities to juggle. A student may need to look after a chronically ill parent or a child. If there is a scheduling conflict between these obligations and the class time, then the student may not even be able to take the course. This could greatly limit a student’s ability to take the necessary courses to complete the desired degree, or at least delay degree completion until the course is available during days and times that are compatible with the student’s schedule. In contrast, having optional class attendance can enable students to meet familial obligations and complete their degrees.

Similarly, I think it is important to consider that a student might have to work in order to afford to go to university at all. If class attendance is mandatory, many students may be denied a higher education because they cannot pay for it without also having a job at the same time, and work hours for the job may conflict with the class schedule. This state of affairs can prevent people from achieving upward economic mobility. Instead they may remain stuck in lower paying jobs and never be able to receive the education needed to gain higher paying jobs. If such people then have children, then the children as young adults would face the same dilemma. The young adults would have parents who cannot cover all the costs of education so that the young adults would have to work, but their job schedules may conflict with course schedules. Thus a mandatory attendance policy could perpetuate intergenerational inequalities between economic classes of people. By instead making attendance optional, students from low-income households have an opportunity to break this cycle and create better lives for themselves and their children.

In summary, there are some very important positive consequences that come with not requiring students to attend classes. These benefits should be seriously considered to inform university class attendance policy so that it is not overly rigid and can rather support student success.

(c) 2017 by Diacorda Amosapa

mandatorycompulsory - adj. necessary, required
~ It is mandatory for job applicants to fill out the form.
~ The new law makes it compulsory for restaurants to recycle all metal and plastic waste.

vital - adj. very important; necessary for life
~ She has played a vital role in our organization’s success.
~ Tourism is a vital part of the country’s economy.

compatible - adj. able to be together or work together without a problem
~ The headset is compatible with all Microsoft, Apple, and Droid devices.
~ After a couple dates we found out that we weren’t really compatible.

perpetuate - v. to make a situation or something continue
~ The organization was founded to help perpetuate the cultural heritage of the country through music, videos, and educational programs.
~ “I don’t want to perpetuate misinformation about the problem, so I tried to research the issue very carefully first,” she said.
 


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